Well, here is the final chapter of Silent Tears. These 8 chapters took forever to write. Like over a year. (You know it wasn’t a good story when haha) I mean, heck, I wrote 10,000+ words last week, way more than all 8 chapters of Silent Tears. I also didn’t really know where I was going with this original story. It was poorly planned, and the characters were bland.
The reason I decided to show you all eight chapters of Silent Tears was so that when SOUTH is published, you can see how much you can improve if you keep at it. Never stop writing. Never stop creating. You will improve and be proud of what you produce.
So, I hope you’ve all enjoyed reading the story that eventually did a 180 and became SOUTH. Enjoy!
Thank you for sticking around until the end! I will go back to talking about the far superior SOUTH novel and my writing progress shortly.
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A little about the story:
Minami Kyuki’s hearts a battle ground of despair. Faced with more difficulties in her life than the normal teen, Minami copes by living one day at a time. But how long before the tragic events of her past haunts her to her death?
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Chapter 8: Over?
INT. OLD ABANDONED HOUSE CAMPBELLTON
OFFICER TOMAS, BRENT and TIM rush down stairs, screaming for
order. DEREK turns his gaze around, seeing the cops, finally
losing his sanity. The fast grip he holds on his gun
loosens and drops to the ground. Raising his hands to his
head, his legs slowly give way and falls to the ground
muttering nonsense to himself; his face twisted with pain
and anger. MINAMI eyes are slightly open, but it looks as if
no one is there. She slowly tries to get up to go towards
her friends. KAYLA is huddled over a body on the floor. MARK
is on the floor, blood bleeding profusely from a gun shot
wound. He silently screams on the floor, writhing in pain.
KAYLA looks up to see the cops and gets up, grabbing her
friend in the process, trying to take her with her. MINAMI
stays frozen, her eyes unfocused, her vision becoming
impaired from the blood coming from a huge gash in her
forehead. The twins, VENESSA and NATALIE take comfort by the
arms of BRENT as he whisks them away from the danger. KAYLA
speaks, trying to convince MINAMI of something, however,
slowly swaying in her spot, does not seem to hear her.
TOMAS
We need an ambulance! Get back up
in here now!
MINAMI
(Narrative Bubble) It’s over…
But…
MINAMI slowly begins to waver towards unconsciousness,
OFFICER TREVOR catching her.
SLOWLY FADE TO BLACK
MINAMI
(Narrative Bubble) Is it ever
really? No….
BLACK
MINAMI
(Narrative Bubble) Never. This was
only the beginning.
INT. HOSPITAL CAMPBELLTON
MINAMI is laying down on a white bed, her eyes closed, a big
bandage around her head. KAYLA lying on the second bed,
covered in a variety of band-aids & gauzes. Both MINAMI’s
and KAYLA’s parents are in the hallway, talking to the cops.
MINAMI slowly opens her eyes. KAYLA looks over to her friend
and turns on her side to get a better view.
KAYLA
Mina! Hey! You’re awake. How you
feeling?
MINAMI looks towards her friend. A big smile plays against
her face.
MINAMI
(Laughs) The best.
KAYLA’s smile fades away, her face becoming more serious.
KAYLA
How in the world can you be so
cheery?
MINAMI
Oh, right. I forgot. The world
ended for you. Actually, after the
first few murders I saw, well, you
tend to zone them out.
KAYLA
Gee, I thought you of all people
would be more sympathetic. A boy
got murdered. In FRONT of OUR eyes!
F***.
MINAMI speaks, her voice now held sympathy.
MINAMI
I know. It bothers me to. DEREK had
no right to do what he did. No one
deserves that.
A shot of a masked killer.
MINAMI
(Narrative Bubble) Except him.
MINAMI
I’ll be here for you, whenever you
need to talk about it. It’s hard to
see death and believe me, you never
get used to seeing it. It’s over
now.
KAYLA
Yeah….
MINAMI looks at the ceiling, at something it seems only she
can see.
MINAMI
(Narrative Bubble) A life was lost
and I doubt the twins or KAYLA
would ever be the same. I don’t
blame them. But I did learn one
thing from this horrible
experience. I know he is still out
there, and I’m going to find him.
MINAMI
I’ll make it my mission in life to
find him and bring him to justice.
It may be unusual, but it’s the
only way I know how….
KAYLA looks at her friend, confused.
KAYLA
Wha-?
MINAMI starts and comes back to earth. She looks at KAYLA.
MINAMI
Haha, sorry, went into my own world
there for a minute. Won’t happen
again!
KAYLA
Pft, yeah right.
MINAMI
Haha yeah.
They both laugh, the wave of terror that had surrounded them
now fading away. MINAMI slowly sits up, her hand
automatically going towards her head.
MINAMI
Man I hope this doesn’t scar. One
big gash on my head is enough.
She looks around the room searching for something.
MINAMI
Where are the twins and how long
was I out? What are our parents
doing? Why aren’t they in here?
KAYLA
Haha, always quick to ask
questions. Let’s see. Our parents
are talking to the cops about what
happened, getting the full deets I
guess. Also cause the doctors
complained that there was too many
people in the room and kicked them
out. The twins weren’t injured so
they sent them home for some rest,
or therapy, I’m not sure which.
Probably both.
MINAMI
And-?
KAYLA
Couple of hours. You got a
concussion or something I think. I
dunno, you hit your head pretty
hard. I’m not doctor so I can’t give
full details.
MINAMI jumps out of the bed then jumps right back in.
KAYLA
Where the heck are you doing?
MINAMI pulls the sheets around her neck.
MINAMI
Where are my clothes!? I got
hospital junk on! I can’t be seen
in this!
KAYLA
Why not?
MINAMI
It’s uncool!
KAYLA rolls her eyes.
KAYLA
Oh you.
They both laugh again.
INT. SUGUARMOUNT SENIOR HIGH SCHOOL HALL WAY
Two weeks has passed since the incident with DEREK. Kids can
be seen in the hall ways gossiping every time they saw
MINAMI, KAYLA, VENESSA and NATALIE.
GIRL 1
I heard DEREK KILLED a boy!
BOY 1
Yeah and he shot one of his crew
MARK! Heard he survived but is
still in the hospital. Haha.
BOY 2
Bet he cried like a baby! Haha.
GIRL 1
Poor girls. I heard they’ll need
hard core therapy for the rest of
their lives!
BOY 1
Yeah. But that Japanese chick, she
still seems as pumped about life as
ever.
INT. SUGARMOUNT SENIOR HIGH SCHOOL CLASS ROOM
MINAMI, VENESSA, NATALIE, and KAYLA are seen walking through
the class room doors. The twins and KAYLA are talking
amongst themselves.
NATALIE
Wow they’re still talking about
what happened. Jeez, do kids ever
stop gossiping?
VENESSA
Yeah, it’s hard enough to try and
forget what happened with ought
them bringing it up every 5
seconds.
KAYLA
My parents are thinking of taking
me out of choir, just so I can stay
close to home more often.
NATALIE AND VENESSA
No!
They take their usual seats in class, all surrounded by each
other. MINAMI laughs at the twins’ reaction, but her eye’s
are somewhere else.
MINAMI
(Narrative Bubble) Every day
and every night it’s the same.
Put on a face in the day so
you don’t scare the kids.
Unveil the mask at night,
where nightmares plague my
once happy dreams.
MR. GARRET enters the room, telling the class to stop their
talking and take out their books to prepare for another
boring lecture.
MINAMI
(Narrative Bubble) I see him
more clearly now than I have
before. I see him as if he
were standing right next to
me.
A shadow of the killer lurks behind MINAMI as she thinks. CU
of MINAMI, staring into nothing, her book open on her desk.
MINAMI
(Narrative Bubble) I got to
bring him to justice. He’s got
to pay for what he has done.
He’s just got to….
CU of her hands clenching into a fist. A shot of her body,
hand in a fist, her face fighting back the rage within.
MINAMI
(Narrative Bubble) I’ll take
his life, lay it out for the
world to see. See if he can
hide from his past then. Make
him suffer first, then do to
him as he has done to me.
A shot of the class room, where some kids in the back
whisper amongst themselves, others passing note, others
taking note, actually paying attention.
MINAMI
(Narrative Bubble) A life for
a life. It’s only fair. Even
if life isn’t.