SOUTH

The Original SOUTH: Silent Tears ch 8 / September 19, 2018 by A.M. Molloy

Well, here is the final chapter of Silent Tears. These 8 chapters took forever to write. Like over a year. (You know it wasn’t a good story when haha) I mean, heck, I wrote 10,000+ words last week, way more than all 8 chapters of Silent Tears. I also didn’t really know where I was going with this original story. It was poorly planned, and the characters were bland.

The reason I decided to show you all eight chapters of Silent Tears was so that when SOUTH is published, you can see how much you can improve if you keep at it. Never stop writing. Never stop creating. You will improve and be proud of what you produce.

So, I hope you’ve all enjoyed reading the story that eventually did a 180 and became SOUTH. Enjoy!

Thank you for sticking around until the end! I will go back to talking about the far superior SOUTH novel and my writing progress shortly.

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A little about the story:

Minami Kyuki’s hearts a battle ground of despair. Faced with more difficulties in her life than the normal teen, Minami copes by living one day at a time. But how long before the tragic events of her past haunts her to her death?

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Chapter 8: Over?

INT. OLD ABANDONED HOUSE CAMPBELLTON

OFFICER TOMAS, BRENT and TIM rush down stairs, screaming for
order. DEREK turns his gaze around, seeing the cops, finally
losing his sanity. The fast grip he holds on his gun
loosens and drops to the ground. Raising his hands to his
head, his legs slowly give way and falls to the ground
muttering nonsense to himself; his face twisted with pain
and anger. MINAMI eyes are slightly open, but it looks as if
no one is there. She slowly tries to get up to go towards
her friends. KAYLA is huddled over a body on the floor. MARK
is on the floor, blood bleeding profusely from a gun shot
wound. He silently screams on the floor, writhing in pain.
KAYLA looks up to see the cops and gets up, grabbing her
friend in the process, trying to take her with her. MINAMI
stays frozen, her eyes unfocused, her vision becoming
impaired from the blood coming from a huge gash in her
forehead. The twins, VENESSA and NATALIE take comfort by the
arms of BRENT as he whisks them away from the danger. KAYLA
speaks, trying to convince MINAMI of something, however,
slowly swaying in her spot, does not seem to hear her.

TOMAS
We need an ambulance! Get back up
in here now!

MINAMI
(Narrative Bubble) It’s over…
But…

MINAMI slowly begins to waver towards unconsciousness,
OFFICER TREVOR catching her.

SLOWLY FADE TO BLACK

MINAMI
(Narrative Bubble) Is it ever
really? No….

BLACK

MINAMI
(Narrative Bubble) Never. This was
only the beginning.

INT. HOSPITAL CAMPBELLTON

MINAMI is laying down on a white bed, her eyes closed, a big
bandage around her head. KAYLA lying on the second bed,
covered in a variety of band-aids & gauzes. Both MINAMI’s
and KAYLA’s parents are in the hallway, talking to the cops.
MINAMI slowly opens her eyes. KAYLA looks over to her friend
and turns on her side to get a better view.

KAYLA
Mina! Hey! You’re awake. How you
feeling?

MINAMI looks towards her friend. A big smile plays against
her face.

MINAMI
(Laughs) The best.

KAYLA’s smile fades away, her face becoming more serious.

KAYLA
How in the world can you be so
cheery?

MINAMI
Oh, right. I forgot. The world
ended for you. Actually, after the
first few murders I saw, well, you
tend to zone them out.

KAYLA
Gee, I thought you of all people
would be more sympathetic. A boy
got murdered. In FRONT of OUR eyes!
F***.

MINAMI speaks, her voice now held sympathy.

MINAMI
I know. It bothers me to. DEREK had
no right to do what he did. No one
deserves that.

A shot of a masked killer.

MINAMI
(Narrative Bubble) Except him.

MINAMI
I’ll be here for you, whenever you
need to talk about it. It’s hard to
see death and believe me, you never
get used to seeing it. It’s over
now.

KAYLA
Yeah….

MINAMI looks at the ceiling, at something it seems only she
can see.

MINAMI
(Narrative Bubble) A life was lost
and I doubt the twins or KAYLA
would ever be the same. I don’t
blame them. But I did learn one
thing from this horrible
experience. I know he is still out
there, and I’m going to find him.

MINAMI
I’ll make it my mission in life to
find him and bring him to justice.
It may be unusual, but it’s the
only way I know how….

KAYLA looks at her friend, confused.

KAYLA
Wha-?

MINAMI starts and comes back to earth. She looks at KAYLA.

MINAMI
Haha, sorry, went into my own world
there for a minute. Won’t happen
again!

KAYLA
Pft, yeah right.

MINAMI
Haha yeah.

They both laugh, the wave of terror that had surrounded them
now fading away. MINAMI slowly sits up, her hand
automatically going towards her head.

MINAMI
Man I hope this doesn’t scar. One
big gash on my head is enough.

She looks around the room searching for something.

MINAMI
Where are the twins and how long
was I out? What are our parents
doing? Why aren’t they in here?

KAYLA
Haha, always quick to ask
questions. Let’s see. Our parents
are talking to the cops about what
happened, getting the full deets I
guess. Also cause the doctors
complained that there was too many
people in the room and kicked them
out. The twins weren’t injured so
they sent them home for some rest,
or therapy, I’m not sure which.
Probably both.

MINAMI
And-?

KAYLA
Couple of hours. You got a
concussion or something I think. I
dunno, you hit your head pretty
hard. I’m not doctor so I can’t give
full details.

MINAMI jumps out of the bed then jumps right back in.

KAYLA
Where the heck are you doing?

MINAMI pulls the sheets around her neck.

MINAMI
Where are my clothes!? I got
hospital junk on! I can’t be seen
in this!

KAYLA
Why not?

MINAMI
It’s uncool!

KAYLA rolls her eyes.

KAYLA
Oh you.

They both laugh again.

INT. SUGUARMOUNT SENIOR HIGH SCHOOL HALL WAY

Two weeks has passed since the incident with DEREK. Kids can
be seen in the hall ways gossiping every time they saw
MINAMI, KAYLA, VENESSA and NATALIE.

GIRL 1
I heard DEREK KILLED a boy!

BOY 1
Yeah and he shot one of his crew
MARK! Heard he survived but is
still in the hospital. Haha.

BOY 2
Bet he cried like a baby! Haha.

GIRL 1
Poor girls. I heard they’ll need
hard core therapy for the rest of
their lives!

BOY 1
Yeah. But that Japanese chick, she
still seems as pumped about life as
ever.

INT. SUGARMOUNT SENIOR HIGH SCHOOL CLASS ROOM

MINAMI, VENESSA, NATALIE, and KAYLA are seen walking through
the class room doors. The twins and KAYLA are talking
amongst themselves.

NATALIE
Wow they’re still talking about
what happened. Jeez, do kids ever
stop gossiping?

VENESSA
Yeah, it’s hard enough to try and
forget what happened with ought
them bringing it up every 5
seconds.

KAYLA
My parents are thinking of taking
me out of choir, just so I can stay
close to home more often.

NATALIE AND VENESSA
No!

They take their usual seats in class, all surrounded by each
other. MINAMI laughs at the twins’ reaction, but her eye’s
are somewhere else.

MINAMI
(Narrative Bubble) Every day
and every night it’s the same.
Put on a face in the day so
you don’t scare the kids.
Unveil the mask at night,
where nightmares plague my
once happy dreams.

MR. GARRET enters the room, telling the class to stop their
talking and take out their books to prepare for another
boring lecture.

MINAMI
(Narrative Bubble) I see him
more clearly now than I have
before. I see him as if he
were standing right next to
me.

A shadow of the killer lurks behind MINAMI as she thinks. CU
of MINAMI, staring into nothing, her book open on her desk.

MINAMI
(Narrative Bubble) I got to
bring him to justice. He’s got
to pay for what he has done.
He’s just got to….

CU of her hands clenching into a fist. A shot of her body,
hand in a fist, her face fighting back the rage within.

MINAMI
(Narrative Bubble) I’ll take
his life, lay it out for the
world to see. See if he can
hide from his past then. Make
him suffer first, then do to
him as he has done to me.

A shot of the class room, where some kids in the back
whisper amongst themselves, others passing note, others
taking note, actually paying attention.

MINAMI
(Narrative Bubble) A life for
a life. It’s only fair. Even
if life isn’t.

The Original SOUTH: Silent Tears ch 7 / September 12, 2018 by A.M. Molloy

Welcome back to another installment of Silent Tears. This is the second last chapter that I wrote. Albeit bad, this chapter was one of my favourite out of all the chapters I wrote for Silent Tears. Based off true events! Well, the school project bit anyway.

I still can't believe this was the original version of SOUTH, even though its absolutely NOTHING like SOUTH. Still, enjoy the unedited version, with all its grammar and story flaws.

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Chapter 7: Zucchini

EXT. MINAM’S HOUSE CAMPBELLTON

MINAMI, KAYLA, NATALIE and VENESSA are seen sitting outside
on the big maple tree in front of MINAMI’s house. They’re
all laughing, NATALIE just finishing telling a joke. The sun
hangs brightly over the city, shining full of life.

MINAMI
(Narrative Bubble) Ever had one of
those dreams where you know you’re
dreaming?

In their hands they hold ice cream, each of their faces
bright with the laughter of youth.

MINAMI
(Narrative Bubble) Like now…. I
know I’m dreaming this. I got to
be.

MINAMI turns to face her friends.

NATALIE
Haha! And you know what else?

MINAMI
What? What?

VENESSA
Oh! Do tell!

NATALIE
He ATE it! Haha!

MINAMI doubles over with laughter, VENESSA has one hand
covering her mouth, trying to keep the ice cream from
falling out. KAYLA drops her ice cream on the ground.

MINAMI
(Narrative Bubble) Things just
don’t come as easy as this now. Not
for me anyway.

KAYLA
Aw man! Heheh. I wasn’t, haha,
wasn’t even half way, haha, half
way done. *snicker*

VENESSA points and laughs at her friend, MINAMI with a big
grin on her scarred face.

MINAMI
(Narrative Bubble) Who knew you
could dream when your knocked out
cold?

MINAMI
C'mon, let’s get you another. We
got to start on that Media Studies
project anyway.

They hop down from the tree, the twins being extra careful
as to not drop their ice cream. MINAMI, who has the entire
stick in her mouth, jumps down trying to be cool.

KAYLA
(To herself)Yay, school work on
Saturday. Joy.

INT. MINAMI’S BEDROOM

KAYLA sits on MINAMI’s bed flipping through a bunch of
papers. The twins are looking though their back packs, while
MINAMI fiddles with the video camera, trying to get it to
work, holding it in weird angles.

KAYLA
So were supposed to film a bunch of
ads & a news cast for Media Studies
right?

MINAMI
(To herself) How do you turn this
thing on? It’s like ancient!

KAYLA sighs, gets up, walks towards MINAMI, looks at the
camera, flicks a switch, turning the camera on. MINAMI looks
at KAYLA with a big grin. KAYLA rolls her eyes.

VENESSA
OK, so we got the cereal add, the
music add and the ‘Top’ news
stories. Everyone remember their
lines?

MINAMI looks away from the camera.

MINAMI
What? We got to memorize stuff?

Slight panic passes through her eyes.

NATALIE
Not really, you mainly wing it.

MINAMI
Oh, gotcha.

(New scene) Shot of NATALIE.

NATALIE
OK! Scene one! Action!

A 'Recording Screen’. MINAMI and KAYLA are standing behind a
table, a bright green Bristol board with the words 'Bedroom
5 News’ printed on it in bright colors taped to the front.
MINAMI has a fake mustache on her face while KAYLA wears her
mother’s old clothes.

MINAMI
(Narrative Bubble) Out of all the
things to dream of, I dream of this
day?

MINAMI
(In a manly voice) Welcome to the
evening news. I’m your host MR
DINGLESMITHS and this is my
partner…

KAYLA
(In a high pitch almost British
voice) NINA NINER.

MINAMI
(Narrative Bubble) Well at
least it’s a pleasant dream.

MIAMI
And we welcome you to Bedroom 5
News.

CU of KAYLA.

KAYLA
But first! Commercials!

Shot of MINAMI and KAYLA. MINAMI leans slightly into the
camera.

MINAMI
Indeed.

INT. MINAM’S HOUSE CAMPBELLTON

A 'Recording Screen’. Shot of MINAMI and NATALIE eating some
cereal. Both are pretending that the cereal taste horrible,
NATALIE is fighting back a grin.

NATALIE
WOW! This cereal taste awful!

MINAMI
Yeah, it’s so bad that I want some
more!

MINAMI pretends to pour some more. Then pretends to take a
bit.

MINAMI
Yuck!

Both her & Natalie smile at the camera with their thumbs
down.

INT. MINAM’S HOUSE CAMPBELLTON

A 'Recording Screen’. A shot of a Circle-O’s cereal, with a
paper cutout of a new name, Horrible-O’s. In front of the
box is a bowl of the Circle-O’s and some bananas and apples.

MINAMI, VENESSA, NATALIE
(Voice only) (Singing) Nothing
taste worse than some
Horrible-O’s! Yuck!

KAYLA
(Voice only) A part of your
everyday healthy breakfast.
Delicious fruit not included.

INT. MINAMI’S HOUSE CAMPBELLTON

A shot of MINAMI, and KAYLA behind the desk with the
'Bedroom 5 News’s once more. A shot of NATALIE

NATALIE
OK! Action!

A 'Recording Screen’. A shot of MINAMI and KAYLA behind the
desk with the sign 'Bedroom 5 News’.

MINAMI
And as promised! Our top news! Nina
Niner?

KAYLA
Here’s the clip now!

The two stand there idly looking around, doing silly faces
at each other. NATALIE clear’s her thought.

NATALIE
(Off screen) AHEM! This is your
director speaking! The camera is
still rolling!

MINAMI and KAYLA look back at the camera all stiff. MINAMI
clears her thought.

MINMAI
Yes of course!

KAYLA
Oh how silly of me! Of us! Hehe.

NATALIE
(Off screen) To the scene!

EXT. MINAM’S HOUSE CAMPBELLTON

A 'Recording Screen’. VENESSA is standing at the camera
while NATALIE is running from something stripped in what
seems to be paper towels.

VENESSA
As you can see, there is a mummy on
the loose! … Zoom in KAYLA! Ahem
I mean cameraman!

MINAMI
(Narrative Bubble) What a silly
day, huh?

Zoom in to MINAMI wrapped badly in toilet paper chasing
NATALIE.

MINAMI
ARG AND SUCH!

NATALIE
THE HORROR! DON’T EAT ME MR MUMMY!

Shot of VENESSA

VENESSA
Back you at the studio.

INT. MINAM’S HOUSE CAMPBELLTON

A 'Recording Screen’. MINAMI and KAYLA are back at the desk.

TOMAS
(Voice far off in the distance)
There they are! …

KAYLA
That concludes…

A dark room is melting into the BG.

KAYLA
…our news today.

The room is slowing fading away to nothing.

MINAMI
(Narrative Bubble)Oh well, guess
you can’t always stay in dream
land. Reality bites. It hurts but I
know that the pain is real. And
that this dream won’t last forever.

BLACK

TOMAS
(Voice far off in the distance) Put
your hands down! PUT THEM DOWN!
down….

The Original SOUTH: Silent Tears ch 6 / September 5, 2018 by A.M. Molloy

Okay, so screw chapter 5. This one might be the worst chapter of Silent Tears yet. The dialogue! It’s cringe worthy. Still, I hope you’ve been enjoying the origin story of SOUTH.

Also, same as usual. Nothing has been edited so expect grammar and story issues. I'm so glad I've improved in my writing.

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Chapter 6: Crimson Regret

INT. POLICE STATION

It’s a slow night, there are only a few cops on duty. One of
the cops is doing paper work, trying to suppress his tired
yawns. Another is standing by the window, looking blankly in
to the distance outside. Two others are talking amongst
themselves in the corner of the room over coffee. The phone
rings. The officer by the window gives a start, then
regaining his posture, turns his gaze towards the phone. He
answers the phone.

OFFICER TOMAS
Hello? … Yes, right away.

He turns around to the other men.

OFFICER TOMAS
Alright men, we got a few missing
persons out there. BRENT and
TREVOR, suit up, were heading out.
TIM, notify the others, were
looking for 2 Asians & a set of
twins, all female. Let’s go!

BRENT looks over to TIM & whispers.

BRENT
Finally, some action.

FADE

INT. OLD ABBANDONED HOUSE CAMPBELLTON

MARK STAGGER sits in the corner, inhaling the white pain
coming from his shoulder. He looks at KAYLA, who’s eyes were
fixed on her friend lying on the floor. He turns his deep
hazel eyes on the twins, VENNESSA and NATALIE. He places his
hand on his injured shoulder, then looks at it, his hand now
stained in his own blood. DEREK is still pacing the room,
looking in the brink of insanity. He keeps rubbing his hand
though his hair, mumbling strange words to himself, every
now and then turning his gun towards the crowd he has
captured in the room. MARK decides to risk talking to DEREK.

MARK
What do you plan on doing DEREK?
You can’t keep us all here forever.

DEREK, startled, points the gun at MARK.

DEREK
Quite MARK. You still never told me
what you were doing here in the
first place, with ought me.

MARK
I came to my senses. So, I decided
to free them before they were hurt.
Too late for that I guess.

DEREK takes in a deep breath, looking up. He turns his gaze
towards MARK, his back hunched over, his gun still still
pointing at his once friend.

DEREK
You tried to free them? Well how’s
that working out for you.

DEREK puts one hand on his head, rubs it through his hair.

DEREK
Now because of you look what
happened. Two innocents are stuck
here.

MARK speaks, but mainly to himself.

MARK
Hey, it wasn’t my idea to bring
them here in the first place.

DEREK walks swiftly towards MARK, a crazed look in his eyes,
the points the gun MARKS face; the twins and KAYLA scream.

DEREK
What did you say?

MARK cowers in the corner, his arms raised over his head.

MARK
N-nothing man! I was just following
what you told me to do, leave me
out of this!

DEREK turns around then screams.

DEREK
Aw man I’m in a s*** load of
trouble aren’t I.

MARK
No s***.

NATALIE, still in her own world, speaks, but so low its
almost as if she speaks to no one.

NATALIE
What do you want from us?

DEREK points the gun at NATALIE. Her sister, shakes with
fear for her sibling.

VENNESSA
Please…. Please, oh God almighty,
please. I don’t…. Please….

NATALIES eyes are no longer filled with fear. Her mind seems
to be in a state of shock and confusion.

DEREK
I didn’t want you, no, not you two
to be hurt. MARK either, but
now…. I had no choice. No choice.
Just you two!

DEREK looks at MINAMI and KAYLA.

DEREK
You’re the ones this world is better
off with!

MINAMI sturs on the floor. KAYLA inches towards the girl.

KAYLA
Mi.. na…mi?

MINAMI, with eyes still closed, speaks softly.

MINAMI
How many drops of blood will it
take for you?

DEREK
Wha-?

MINAMI slowly gets up.

KAYLA
MINA!

THE TWINS
MINAMI!

MARK
She’s alive. F****** good s***.

MINAMI slowly sits up, KAYLA moves forward to aid her.
MINAMI then raises her hand to her head, wincing in pain.
She looks at DEREK.

MINAMI
How many?

DEREK
What you talking about b****?

Spit flys from his mouth. Tears are now running down his
eyes, his lips becoming wet from his own saliva running out
of his mouth; his body, shaking in what seems to be fear.

MINAMI
How many others have you hurt? 1?
2? 10? How many? I know we
certainly werent the first. I get
you.

DEREK
NO YOU DON’T!

MINAMI slowly stands up, staggering.

MINAMI
Yes. I do. Ive had my family ripped
away from me too. I feel your
anger, your pain.

DEREK bends over, both hands to his head, screaming as loud
as he can.

DEREK
SHUT UP!

He cocks his gun and goes to shoot MINAMI. MARK gets up.

MARK
NO!

EXT. OLD ABBADONED HOUSE CAMPBELLTON

Gun shots can be heard, birds flutter in the distance.

EXT. CAMPBELLTON

The three officers look at each other as they hear gun shots
in the distance. They pull over their car on the side of the
road.

BRENT
What was that?

TOMAS
Gun shots.

TIM raises his gun and looks at his boss as to what to do
next.

TOMAS
Let’s go.

The men climb out of the car and head into the bushes, guns
raised. TOMAS reaches for his walkie talkie.

TOMAS
This is officer TOMAS, we need back
up on that old road. Two gun shots
were fired. I repeat, back up…

TIM, slightly ahead of his two coworkers, pushes through
the bushes. He stops in his tracks.

TIM
Boss? Check this out.

TOMAS walks past the bushes, BRENT following him.

TOMAS
Let’s check it out.

INT. OLD ABBANDONED HOUSE CAMPBELLTON

The three cops enter silently and switly, guns ready to
shoot. Muffled noises can be hear from the room below.
Whispering, TIM speaks.

TIM
Should we wait for back up?

TOMAS
No. I don’t want to risk it. You
stay here, let them know where we
are. BRENT and I will go check it
out.

TIM, shivering slightly from the still ringing sounds of gun
shots, nods. His partners leave him behind, alone, shivering
in the darkness.

The Original SOUTH: Silent Tears ch 5 / August 29, 2018 by A.M. Molloy

Hey guys. Have you been enjoying Silent Tears? Well, this might be the worst chapter of Silent Tears yet. Hope you enjoy the origin story of SOUTH.

Once more, nothing has been edited or altered. Therefore plenty of grammar and story issues abound.

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Chapter 5: Minami Kyuki

INT. OLD ABANDONED HOUSE CAMPBELLTON

Black with writing on it.

WRITING
How come no one ever thinks about
the moon rise? Is it not
significant enough?

MINAMI KYUKIs body is lying unconcious on the ground of the
abandoned house, the body of the dead boy near her side. The
twins, NATALIE and VENNESA DOUMONT, cower next to MARK
STAGGER, fear in their eyes.

MARK
C'mon DEREK, it’s been hours. Let
us go, we won’t tell.

KAYLA nods. DEREK ignores them. NATALIE points to MINAMI’s
body.

NATALIE
Is she… dead?

KAYLA
No, just unconscious. DEREK fired a
shot but missed her. So, in anger,
he hit her in the head instead….
but…. he is….

She points to the dead body of the young boy. The twins
gasp. Out of fear they shut them self’s up from the world.
CU of MINAMI.

KAYLA
(Narrative)MINAMI!

Shot of the twins.

KAYLA
(Narrative)The twins too!

A back shot of KAYLA as she looks at DEREK, who is is pacing
the room, unsure of what to do. KAYLA begins to cry silent
Tears.

KAYLA
(Narrative)No…. This can’t be
happening. Not now. Too fast….
It’s all happening too fast. I
couldn’t… couldn’t…

CU of KAYALAs eyes, as tears poor down her smooth face.

KAYLA
I can’t move. I can’t… can’t go
to my friend to help her! My best
friend…

FLASH BACK of earlier days. Different shots of MINAMI and
KAYLA hanging out together, some with the twins. MINAMI is
seen making funny faces to her friends, making them laugh.
MINAMI is showing KAYLA how to do some martial art moves.
KAYLA is sick and MINAMI is helping nursing her friend back
to health. CU of the unconscious MINAMI.

KAYLA
(Narrative) Why does this kind of
stuff always happen to you?

FLASH BACK.

EXT. SUGUARMONT HIGH STEPS CAMPBELLTON

MINAMI, KAYLA and the twins are sitting on the steps out
side their school during lunch hour. The sun shining
brightly upon the horizon.

MINAMI
Hey guys?

NATALIE
Huh?

MINAMI
How come everyone always says
"sunrise" and “sunset” and nobody
ever thinks about the moonrise?

VENESSA
What are you talking about?

KAYLA
MINAMI’s being weird again.

NATALIE
But the sun is still out, why
mention the moon?

MINAMI turns to face her friends.

MINAMI
My dad always used to tell me that
the moon rises to give people light
at night when they are lonely.

NATALIE looks at MINAMI and then to the sky. KAYLA looks as
though she is suppressing a giggle.

MINAMI
My family is there, to raise the
moon. Just for me. They always know
how to make me happy.

KAYLA, letting out a bit of laughter.

KAYLA
OK, where does this come from?

VENESSA
I think its deep and kind of sad.

NATALIE looks back at MINAMI.

NATALIE
Hey, you’ll always have us!

VENESSA
Hey c'mon, we got a little bit of
time before the bell rings for next
class, let’s go race to the
baseball field!

NATALIE AND MINAMI
Yeah!

KAYLA
Sure!

The three friends get up and begin to run towards the field.
CU of MINAMI

KAYLA
(Narrative) You were always there
for me.

INT. OLD ABANDONED HOUSE CAMPBELLTON

Shot of the unconscious MINAMI lying on the cold floor.

KAYLA
(Narrative) Where was I when you
needed me?

EXT. SUGUARMONT HIGH CAMPBELLTON

KAYLA suddenly stops, her hand clutching to her chest in
pain.

KAYLA
Ahhk… Aack… gu gu…

MINAMI, a big smile on her face, notices something is wrong
and turns around, her smile fading. The twins hear the
sudden change of movement and turn around.

NATALIE
KAYLA?

MINAMI
KAYLA!

KAYLA is on her knees, gasping for air.

KAYLA
Haaaa… Gaa…. *gasp*

VENESSA
She’s having an asthma attack!

She turns around frantically, looking for help.

VENESSA
Someone help her!

NATALIE
What do we do?

MINAMI rushes towards her friend. She begins to frantically
dig in KAYLA’s backpack. She takes out an inhaler.

MINAMI
Got it!

She turns to the twins.

MINAMI
Call 911 or a teacher or something!

She turns her gaze towards the gasping KAYLA.

MINAMI
Here.

She gives KAYLA the inhaler. KAYLA begins to calm down. She
begins to fall in MINAMI’s arms. Teachers can be heard in
the distance, yelling for space. Shot of KAYLA and MINAMI.

KAYLA
(Narrative) You were always there
for me….

END FLASH BACK

KAYLA is see crouching, her arms wrapped around her legs,
trying to form a ball.

INT. MINAMI’S HOUSE

LYNN, DENNIS, ROSA and DANIEL CONNERY are sitting in the
living room. ROSA is pacing, her husband DANIEL, watching
her.

ROSA
It’s 10:00, where they hell are
they?

The phone rings.

ROSA
We should call the police.

LYNN picks up the phone.

LYNN
Hello?

She talks for a minuet, then hangs up the phone.

LYNN
That was the twins mother. She said
they left for choir practice and
never came back.

ROSA
That’s it, we call the police.

She grabs the phone from LYNN’s hands and starts to dial.

FADE TO BLACK

WRITING
The time has stopped into a
standstill.

The Original SOUTH: Silent Tears ch 4 / August 22, 2018 by A.M. Molloy

A new day, a ‘new’ installment, chapter 4, of the original story Silent Tears, before it became SOUTH. I warn you, this story is so bad, (and short), that it’s funny. This one here is real gold in the way of bad writing.

(Seriously, where did I come up with this stuff?)

Unedited, which means grammar and story flaws are plentiful.

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Chapter 4: Hostages

INT. CAMPBELLTON AN OLD ABANDONED HOUSE

MARK STAGGER
You can’t harm them all! There’s
too many of them!

DEREK reaches for something in his pocket, tightening his grip
on the boy, who stands silent in fear.

DEREK BEIYIT
Maybe not all, but I got to start
somewhere.

DEREK swiftly pulls out a gun, then shoots the boy in the head,
killing him instantly. MINAMI, KAYLA, and MARK stand back in
shock and fear. KAYLA falls to the ground, sobbing,
shrieking. MARK slowly moves away from DEREK, muttering
words only he can hear. MINAMI’s eyes widen, her hands begin
to shakes, clenching into a tight fist.

FLASH BACK of the murderer of her family, the gun in his hands
as he shots MINAMI’s parents. END FLASHBACK.

DEREK points the gun at KAYLA and MINAMI. KAYLA screams as MARK
falls to the ground, tears pouring out of his dark brown
eyes.

MINAMI
No…. no…. (screams) NO!

DEREK
Shut up b**** or your next.

He points the gun at her.

DEREK
I’ve had enough of Asians! There
good for nothing low life’s, who
take away all that is good in this
world.

MINAMI tilts her head, an insane look in her eyes. She is
not herself.

MINAMI
Your no better than him.

MINAMI slowly moves towards DEREK, her left hand moving towards
the chain attached to her pants.

MINAMI
KAYLA, do you know why I always
have this chain with me?

KAYLA
What the hell? Are you crazy? He’s
got a bloody gun!

DEREK points the gun towards KAYLA.

DEREK
Shut the hell up!

KAYLA shrieks, cowering in the corner.

MINAMI
No. It’s not a fashion statement.

She undoes the chain from her pants.

MINAMI
It’s so I can hurt people like YOU!

She lunges towards DEREK, rage in her eyes. DEREK shoots, misses.
He fires again, missing MINAMI but grazing MARK on the
shoulder. MARK screams in pain. MINAMI reaches DEREK, puts
the chain around his neck and pulls with all her might.
DEREK chokes.

MINAMI
Who’s better now? I wasn’t able to
stop you then, but now

DEREK
Wha… cough… talkin ‘bout?

She pulls harder. DEREKS eyes begin to roll back.

KAYLA
MINAMI NO!

MINAMI looks up, her eyes change, revealing fear. She drops the
chain. DEREK holds his neck, recovers, then points the gun
at MINAMI. She falls to her knees.

MINAMI
Not again. Please, not again.

DEREK
I was right. You’re all insane! You
wanna know why I dislike your
'kind?’ I was 14.

He holds the gun shakenly at MINAMI.

DEREK
Things were great. Then we went for
that trip in Japan.

FLASH BACK as he talks.

DEREK
Me and my mom were having a great
time, but we got lost. Then this
man with a scar on his left check
came up to us. We ask him where we
were, then he took out a gun.

DEREK’S MOM
Please! Don’t harm my son!

The man grabs YOUNG DEREK by his hair, throws him aside.
YOUNG DEREK’s mom screams. The man shoots both her legs.
YOUNG DEREK runs to hide behind a garbage can as the man
deals the final bow to his mother. END FLASH BACK. DEREKS
eyes tear up.

DEREK
He KILLED her! I saw her murdered.
The cops didn’t even do anything.
He, and all the rest of the Asian
world will pay!

He begins to point the gun at everyone, as if not sure who
to shoot first. MARK is still in the corner, in pain.

MINAMI gets up, clearly angered by DEREK’S story. She points
to the scar on her face.

MINAMI
See this scar? See it? This is a
constant reminder of what I’ve
seen. I would count myself lucky if
I were you, considering that’s all
YOU seen. I witnessed BOTH of my
parents die, along with the rest of
my family too. So one of your
parents is dead. Big deal. Grow up!

DEREK grabs MINAMI by the shoulders, pushes her against the
wall and points the gun to her head.

DEREK
SHURT UP! What do you know, your
just as bad as him! You bloody
tried to kill me!

MINAMI
I tried to kill you? You tried to
kill US! You’re the one with the gun!

DEREK cocks the gun, anger in his eyes, then points it at
MINAMI.

KAYLA
MINAMI!

MARK
DEREK NO!

Shot of outside the old house as a gunshot is heard.

EXT. CAMPBELLTON

VENESSA and NATALIE DOUMONT are seen leaving their house.

NATALIE
We’ll be back in an hour or so.

VENESSA
We just got choir practice.

They close the door.

NATALIE
I wonder if MINAMI and KAYLA will
be there, they weren’t in school.

VENESSA
It’s choir. You know how much
MINAMI likes to sing. If she’s not
there, then something is wrong.

NATALIE
Haha yeah. True too.

DENNIS comes into the scene while the twins are walking.

DENNIS
Allo les filles. Did you see
MINAMI?

VENESSA
No, she wasn’t at school, why?

DENNIS
She hasn’t come home yet.

The twins look at each other.

NATALIE
We’ll let you know if we see her.

EXT. SOMEWHERE IN CAMPBELLTON

VENESSA and NATALIE are seen walking in the woods.

NATALIE
I can’t believe you talked me into
this. What was I thinking? Skipping
choir to go look for them.

VENESSA
Come on NAT, this is our friends
we’re talking about, we should be
looking for them.

NATALIE stops.

NATALIE
Shouldn’t we have told mom at
least? Or call the cops. Yeah, it’s
their jobs to do this kind of
thing.

VENESSA turns around to face her sister.

VENESSA
Yeah, we should, but who knows
MINAMI and KAYLA better than us?

NATALIE
(to herself) Their parent’s
maybe?

A gunshot is heard in the distance, both twins twirl around
to the direction of the noise.

NATALIE AND VENESSA
What was that?

VENESSA
That was close by.

NATALIE
And we should be farther away then.

VENESSA
What if they’re in danger?

NATALIE
All the more reason to call the
cops.

VENESSA grabs NATALIE and drags her to where they heard a
gunshot. Passing a couple of threes, they take a left turn
and an old house is reveled. The place doesn’t look sturdy,
but it stands tall and proud in the moon light.

NATALIE
We’re not going in THERE are we?
Exploring things is MINAMI’s job,
not ours.

VENESSA
Which would be a perfect place to
go check if she is there….

She looks at NATALIE.

VENESSA
You go first.

NATALIE
What? Are you crazy?

VENESSA
Fine.

VENESSA craws slowly towards the old building, NATALIE
follows, hesitantly.

INT. OLD ABANDONED HOUSE CAMPBELLTON

There are muffled voices coming from the floor below.

NATALIE
Look VENESSA, someone was here!

VENESSA and NATALIE find a door, slightly ajar. They creep
down the stairs. They reach the bottom to find MINAMI lying
on the floor, KAYLA screaming, a boy in the corner, another
on the floor, blood from his head, and another boy with a
gun. KAYLA looks up. She can barely speak from the fear, but
utters words in a whisper.

KAYLA
Run…

The twins stand in shock. Then DEREK turns around, faces the
twins. He points the gun at them. Shot of the twins.

NATALIE
I really wish I didn’t let you talk
me into this.

The Original SOUTH: Silent Tears ch 3 / August 15, 2018 by A.M. Molloy

The next installment, chapter 3, of the original story Silent Tears, before it became SOUTH. I warn you, this story is so bad, (and short), that it’s funny.

Again, I’ve left it intentionally unedited to show my bad grammar and storytelling back in 2008ish.

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Chapter 3: Betrayal

INT. CAMPBELLTON AN OLD ABANDONED HOUSE

MINAMI KYUKI and KAYLA CONNERY are standing in a dark room, looking
over a crumpled business card.

MINAMI
I know where I see it!

KAYLA
Where?

MINAMI
My place, the night of the murder.

Suddenly, up above, a noise could be heard. MINAMI and KAYLA both
look at each other.

MINAMI
(Yelling) Hello?

KAYLA quickly puts her hand over MINAMI’s mouth.

KAYLA
What are you doing? Are you crazy?
What if it’s them?

MINAMI pushes KAYLA’s hand aside.

MINAMI
What if it’s not them? Besides, who
cares if it is, they alone know
were here and it’s them who most
likely can get us out!

KAYLA looks at the ceiling as another noise is heard. The sound
is now coming form behind the door. MINAMI puts up her
hands, ready to fight, and this time, win. KAYLA bends down
behind her, as if to hide behind her friend. The sound of
the lock being undone can be heard from the other side of
the old wooden door. Slowly, it creaks open.

INT. MINAMI’S HOUSE LIVING ROOM

LYNN is sitting on the couch doing a crossword puzzle. She eye’s
the clock on the VCR many times. DENNIS comes in the front
door and enters the living room.

DENNIS
Allo.

LYNN
The school called today. They said
MINAMI has missed school, and it’s
4:30 and she’s not home yet.

DENNIS looks at his wife, then at the clock on the VCR. He sighs,
then turns to walk away.

DENNIS
I’ll go look for her at the school.

He leaves, leaving LYNN alone in the house with the animals. LYNN
picks up the phone and begins to dial.

INT. KAYLA’S HOUSE KITCHEN

MRS CONNERY is standing at the kitchen counter, making
supper with a scowl on her face. TRAVIS CONNERY comes in
through the front door and puts his bag on the floor.

TRAVIS CONNERY
Hey mom, what’s for-?

MRS CONNERY
Don’t you ‘hey mom’ me TRAVIS
CONNERY.

TRAVIS looks confused.

TRAVIS
Wha-?

MRS CONNERY
The school called today saying you
missed classes.

TRAVIS
I didn’t! That call wasn’t for me!

MRS CONNERY
(Sarcastically)Oh really? Then
who was it for then? Mr. who
-always-skips-school.

TRAVIS
I bet it was KAYLA.

MRS CONNERY
You know your sister is better than
that.

The phone rings, interrupting their argument. MRS CONNERY looks
at the caller ID.

MRS CONNERY
Hum… MINAMI is calling.

She picks it up.

MRS CONNERY
KAYLA is not here MINAMI, call back
later.

Just as she is about to hang up the phone, the voice on the other
end screams.

LYNN
Don’t hang up the phone!

MRS CONNERY puts the phone back to her ear.

MRS CONNERY
I’m sorry LYNN, I’m going to have
to call you back, I got 'kid’
issues again.

LYNN
That’s why I’m calling. Is MINAMI
there? I got a call from the school
saying she missed today and she
isn’t home yet. I was wondering if she
was with KAYLA.

MRS CONNERY
KAYLA isn’t even here.

She looks at TRAVIS.

MRS CONNERY
I got to go.

She hangs up the phone.

MRS CONNERY
You’re off the hook. Now,

TRAVIS
I told you it wasn’t me!

MRS CONNERY
Go out and look for your sister.

INT. CAMPBELLTON AN OLD ABANDONED HOUSE

MINAMI stands ready to fight, KAYLA behind her on the
ground. The door slowly opens, and a figure emerges. MARK
STAGGER steps into the room.

MINAMI
What do YOU want?

MARK
I mean you no harm!

KAYLA and MINAMI give him a dirty look.

MARK
Seriously! I just came to….
Woah, wait.

MARK points to KAYLA.

MARK
DEREK said he was going to let you
go this morning! What are you still
doing here?

MINAMI
What am I? Dried sushi?

MARK
Um, I don’t know. But I guess I had
a feeling that he wouldn’t do it,
which is why I’m here.

MINAMI
Oh. Really. You know, I live by the
rule, 'do to others as you want
done to yourself.’ I got some eggs
and some rocks at my house. You
want to come over? Oh! And maybe I
can find a glass bottle and break
that over YOUR head. Hum? Sound
fun, no?

KAYLA looks at MINAMI.

KAYLA
He hit you with a glass bottle?

MARK
It was an accident!

MINAMI
…. Right…. And I suppose 'this’
is an accident as well.

MINAMI does a spinning round house kick which lands hard on
MARKS head. MARK lands on the ground.

KAYLA
Nice shot MINA!

He gets up, rubbing his head.

MARK
Screw you *****! I came here to
freakin free you man!

He wipes the blood off the newly made cut on his forehead.

MARK
Now come on, before I change my
mind and believe that DEREK is
right.

KAYLA
Right about what?

MARK
About-

MARK is interrupted, for by the door is DEREK, leaning on
the wall, his face grim. By his side, under his arms is a
young Asian boy.

DEREK
About what MARK? Tell them.

MARK
Crap.

DEREK
That’s right. You can’t.

MINAMI
Oh! Great! Your here!

MINAMI grabs to crumples business card from KAYLA’S hand and
shoves it into DEREK’S face.

MINAMI
Who gave you that card? Where did
you get it? Who wrote on it? Tell
me!

DEREK
Ha! All you need to know is that
it’s from Japan.

MARK
And it’s the start of his
obsession.

MINAMI
(To herself) Obsession?

DEREK
Quiet!

MARK
No! You be quiet for once! I’ve
been with you since grade school.
You were the nicest guy around. But
then you went on that trip to Japan
and you’ve never been the same. Now
all you care about is harming
Asians. What’s wrong with you man?

CU of DEREK grinding his teeth.

MARK
You can’t harm them all! There’s
too many of them!

DEREK reaches for something in his pocket, tightening his
grip on the boy, who stands silent in fear.

DEREK
Maybe not all, but I got to start
somewhere.

DEREK swiftly pulls out a gun, then shoots the boy in the
head, killing him instantly. MINAMI, KAYLA, and MARK stand
back in shock and fear.

The Original SOUTH: Silent Tears ch 2 / August 10, 2018 by A.M. Molloy

Continuing on with the original story of SOUTH, Silent Tears, here is chapter 2. I love looking back at old stuff and seeing how far I’ve come. This stuff is golden.

Also, I’ve left the story unedited, so you can see all its flaws, both story wise and grammatically.

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Chapter 2: Trapped

INT. SUGUARMOUNT SENIOR HIGH MR LANDRYS CHEMISTRY CLASS

MR LANDRY is standing by his desk, pointing at the board, explaining
a chemistry problem. The class appears to be bored. TYLER
BUTTLER and MARK STAGGER are anxious, nervous looking. MARK
fumbles with his pencil. DEREK BEYIT sits at his desk, calm,
and taking notes from the board. He glares at MARK, who now
looks intently at the board, staring into the abyss. VENESSA and
NATALIE DOUMONT look at each other. NATALIE takes a a piece
of her chemistry notes, writes down a note, then passes it
on to VENESSA. The note reads: “I saw MINAMI walking to
school this morning. Where is she?” VENESSA shrugs, then
leans forward.

VENESSA
(Whispering) Come to think of
it, I haven’t seen KAYLA here
this morning either.

MR LANDRY
Girls! Passing notes and whispering
during my lectures?

VENESSA and NATALIE both jump, startled by the sudden appearance
of their teacher.

NATALIE
Sorry sir.

MR LANDRY goes to speak when the bell rings. The twins pick up
their things and leave the room swiftly.

INT. SUGUARMOUNT SENIOR HIGH HALLWAY

Students rush about to get to their next class, while some take
their time and chat on their cell phones. Others go to their
lockers, searching for an item they have forgotten. DEREK,
MARK, and TYLER was seen walking down the hall.

MARK
DEREK, I think the twins are on to
us.

TYLER
No they are not.

MARK
Uh huh!

DEREK
Shut up! They’re just noticing there
not at school. They don’t have a
clue it’s us.

INT. CAMPBELLTON MILL

MR CONNERY is reading the morning newspaper when the phone suddenly
rings, startling her. MR CONNERY looks at the phone. He
screws up his face in a scowl.

MR CONNERY
Darn school again. What the hell do
they want now? TRAVIS better not be
in trouble again.

He picks up the phone.

MR CONNERY
Hello?

SUGUARMOUNT PRE-RECORDED MESSAGE
This is the Vice-Principal of
Suguarmount Senior High, MR RODD. I
am calling to inform you that your
son or daughter has missed

MRS CONNERY hangs up the phone, looking very unpleased.

MRS CONNERY
TRAVIS CONNERY when you get home.

INT. CAMPBELLTON AN OLD ABANDONED HOUSE

MINAMI is seen lying on the basement floor in the dark, bleeding.
A dark figure is kneeled over MINAMI, hand outreached.

THE FIGURE
(Whispers) Hey!

The figure touches MINAMI. MINAMI winces in pain, then
slowly opens her eyes.

MINAMI
Erg... Wha? <Ow….>

MINAMI slowly sits up and blinks.

THE FIGURE
MINAMI!

MINAMI
Wha? Who are-?

The figure hugs MINAMI, then let’s go almost as fast. MINAMI takes
a look at the figure, who looks well beaten. Before MINAMI
can realize who it is, the figure speaks again.

THE FIGURE
They got to you to!

MINAMI
KAYLA? Is that you?

The light shines on the figure, revealing her true identity.

KAYLA
Yeah. I’ve been here since after
the Talent show. On my way home,
these 3 guys came up to me and
started throwing rocks at me, then
they forced me here. I haven’t been
able to sleep a wink.

As KAYLA speaks, a flash back shows her words.

MINAMI
Why? What did we do?

KAYLA shrugs. MINAMI looks around.

MINAMI
What do we do now?

KAYLA
Get out. That’s what.

KAYLA looks to the door.

KAYLA
The question is how.

MINAMI gets up then stumbles towards the door. She takes a good
look at it then does a powerful back kick. MINAMI falls back
to the ground, but the door does not budge.

KAYLA
The door is barred on the outside
you know.

MINAMI is seen rubbing her foot.

MINAMI
Yeah. Thanks for the info. Have you
looked around the place? Maybe
there’s another exit. (To herself)
Like a portal to another world or
something cool like that.

KAYLA
No. I was too afraid to move. (To
herself) You and your portals.

MINAMI
Well then, what are we waiting for.

MINAMI limps past KAYLA and begins to feel around, looking
for an exit.

MINAMI
Aha!

KAYLA
WHAT?

MINAMI
I found something!

KAYLA
I repeat, what?!

MINAMI
Hehe. A business card!

KAYLA
MINAMI!

MINAMI
I can add this to my collection….

KAYLA rolls her eyes, while MINAMI inspects the card.

MINAMI
Spiffy. It’s in Japanese…

KAYLA
There’s got to be a way out-

MINAMI
(To herself)Hey someone wrote
on the back!

KAYLA
Here. Maybe if we move some of
those crates, (if that’s what they
are), we might find a door or
something.

MINAMI squints, trying to read the writing.

MINAMI
(To herself) DEREK….
(Mumble) See you soon
(Mumble)(Gasp)

KAYLA turns around to look at MINAMI

KAYLA
What now?

MINAMI
I…. I know that writing.

KAYLA
So? It’s not going to help us get
out of here.

MINAMI
(To herself) Well, the card is
in Japanese, but that’s not
important. It’s just a regular
business card for some random
place. It’s what on the back,
written in English that got my
attention.

KAYLA
Let me see it.

MINAMI hands over the card to KAYLA. KAYLA takes a good look
at the card and reads it aloud.

KAYLA
DEREK, I am so happy to have meet
you. See you soon. Don’t tell,
means no lies.

KAYLA looks up.

KAYLA
DEREK… I think I know someone by
that name.

MINAMI
Well, you do. He’s the guy who
brought me here, and by the looks
of it, you too. (Narrative
Bubble) Where have I seen this
writing before?

KAYLA
That’s it, we got to get out of
here!

MINAMI
Snaps! I know where I’ve seen it!

KAYLA
Where?

MINAMI
My place, the night of the murder.

Suddenly, up above, a noise could be heard.

The Original SOUTH - Silent Tears / August 6, 2018 by A.M. Molloy

Hey ya’ll! Ever want a good laugh at a horribly \ written story ‘cause you’re bored and have nothing better to do? Look no more! I’ve decided to share the first (and only) volume of Silent Tears here on my blog for your entertainment.

The story was poorly planned and there wasn’t much character development. It was also written to be a comic script yet made in the style of a film script.

Just look at how much this story changed since 2008. (It started in a high school and not college).

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Also, as an added bonus, Silent Tears has a prologue and I made an animatic for it back in college. Not only has my writing and storytelling improved, but so has my art. This is so bad I have to share:

(Just know my Japanese sucked back in 2009. It's soooo much better now).

Side note, here is what I had in mind for the cover for the first volume. On the left was the original cover and on the right was the "special edition" version. Not sure what was going to be in the special edition besides a new cover but enjoy all the same!~ (Art by yours truly).

Chapter 1: The Unwanted Gift

EXT. SUGARMOUNT SENIOR HIGH SCHOOL FRONT DOORS

The sun is setting, showing a wonderful array of colors. Random
teens call their parents to come pick them up. MINAMI KYUKI,
KAYLA CONNERY, VENESSA and NATALIE DOUMONT are leaving the
school, all laughing and talking about their night. A banner
is held on top of the entrance saying: ‘Sugarmount Senior
High Talent Show!’

MINAMI KYUKI
(Narrative Bubble) How long
has it been?

MINAMI
Man! That competition was brutal
this year!

VANESSA DOUMONT
I’ll say. (To herself) And all they
got was a lame gift certificate.

NATALIE DOUMONT
It’s a good thing that magician
didn’t win. (To herself) I totally
saw that egg in his hand!

MINAMI smiles and laughs at her friends as they walk down
the steps.

MINAMI
(Narrative Bubble)That’s
right. Four years now. Four years
since my family was brutally
murdered.

MINAMI
Hey, I got to jet. My parental
units are expecting me home after
the show. Plus, I got to something
to do.

KAYLA CONNERY
Kay.

CU Minami

MINAMI
My name is MINAMI 'SOUTH’ KYUKI.
When I was only 12 years old, a
masked man came into my home and
took the lives of my entire family, making
me an orphan.

EXT. CAMPBELLTON

An aerial view of Campbellton.

MINAMI
(Narrative Bubble) Today was a
special day for me. It wasn’t
just the day of my school’s
talent show.

INT. MINAMI’S HOUSE

MINAMI enters her house. ANGIE, the family dog, greets her with
a lick and a bark. Two cats lay curled up on the couch where
LYNN sits. DENNIS sits in his rocking chair, next to the
couch.

MINAMI
I’m home!

MINAMI
(Narrative Bubble) No, it was
more than that.

DENNIS
Welcome home MINA!

LYNN
How was it?

MINAMI
Awesome! Say, I’m going to take a
shower, k?

LYNN
O.K. Don’t take too long.

MINAMI is seen walking up the stairs, waving her hand, not looking
back.

MINAMI
Of course! (Narrative Bubble) Today
was the anniversary of my parents
death.

INT. MINAMI’S HOUSE BATHROOM

MINAMI turns on the tap. MINAMI’s arms are forward on the wall,
supporting her weight, her head hung low, looking defeated.
CU of MINAMI’s face. Her eyes stare blankly at the floor.

MINAMI
(Narrative Bubble) No one
knows who the murderer was, but
he was said to have committed
suicide in the fire he
created.

INT. MINAMI’S HOUSE HER ROOM

MINAMI is seen dressed, drying her hair with a towel. A
large array of martial art trophies decorates her room. Several
swords hang from the wall and some drawings that MINAMI
herself had done were on the wall as well, by her desk.

MINAMI
(Narrative Bubble) But I know
the truth. I saw his face.

A flash back of when MINAMI used the scissors to cut the
man’s mask, showing a bit of his face. Flash back end. MINAMI
goes to a box by her bed and as she slowly picks it it, she
sits down on her bed. She opens it up slowly. Inside the box
contains a burnt nail, a burnt part of a newspaper, and a crumpled
picture with water marks showing tears have fallen on it.
MINAMI picks up each object one by one then she places them
carefully on her bed. The last one she picks up is the
crumpled picture. The picture shows a younger version of
MINAMI with her birth parents. A tear runs down her face.

MINAMI
I’m going to find him mom, dad. I
know he got out alive. I just know
it! And I’ll let the world know of
it too, just you watch.

MINAMI touches the picture softly as she speaks. She then places
the picture on her bed with the other objects, then looks up
at the ceiling, staring at nothing.

MINAMI
(Sigh) I want to see you so
bad. I know I have it good here
now, but I miss my friends, my
home back in Kobe. Oh mom,
dad. It hurts so bad….

MINAMI looks longingly at one of her sharpest blades. She closes
her eye’s and leans back.

MINAMI
<May you find peace.> I know I wont
until he pays….

EXT. CAMPBELLTON

Next morning. MINAMI is seen running to school.

MINAMI
Snaps! I’m going to be late! Sleep
through that darn alarm again!

3 figures emerge from the shadows as MINAMI runs by. DEREK
BEYIT smiles sinisterly. MARK STAGGER and TYLER BUTTLER
laugh.

DEREK BEYIT
Hey! You!

MARK STAGGER
Japanese chick!

MINAMI stops in her tracks, nearly falls over, and

MINAMI
Hiya.

MINAMI turns to leave, but TYLER BUTTER reaches into his bag and
pulls out and egg, then throws it at her. The egg hit’s
MINAMI in the back of the head. MINAMI turns around, arms in
the air in disgust.

DEREK
My name is DEREK. This is TYLER and
MARK.

TYLER BUTTLER
And we got a problem

MINAMI
You darn right we do. What the hell
was that for? (To herself) Jerks.
(Narrative Bubble) Something isn’t
right here….

DEREK
MARK here tells me it’s your
birthday this Thursday. How old you
going to be? 17?

MINAMI
<Screw you> I’m off.

She turns to leave.

DEREK
Well, since were nice guys, we got
you a birthday present.

MARK
Something from the heart.

MARK smiles as he speaks. MINAMI answers, her back facing
the teenage boys.

MINAMI
Don’t care.

DEREK looks at MARK and TYLER. They all pick up eggs from their
backpacks and throw them at MINAMI. MINAMI stumbles.

MARK
We’re still talking to you stupid
Japanese!

DEREK picks up a rock, tosses it in the air then throws it
at MINAMI.

DEREK
Happy Birthday! (Laughs)

MARK and TYLER both do the same as DEREK.

TYLER
And this is forever coming into
OUR country!

TYLER throws his rock, hitting MINAMI in the arm.

MARK
And this is for being alive!

The rock hits her in the chest.

MINAMI
(Narrative Bubble)What’s
happening to me? Why are they hitting
me this way?

The boys continue to throw rocks at her. MINAMI goes to kick them,
but a rock hits her on the head, knocking her down. MARK
then picks up a glass bottle from the ground then hits
MINAMI with it over the head, sending her to the ground.
MINAMI stops moving and doesn’t get up.

TYLER
What the heck did you do that for?
We agreed just to play around with
her a bit! Not to kill her!

DEREK
I don’t think she’s dead.

MARK
Well what do we do with her?

DEREK smiles.

DEREK
Same as the last boys.

CU of MARK and TYLER, looking confused.

INT. CAMPBELLTON AN OLD ABANDONED HOUSE

MINAMI is seen lying on the basement floor in the dark, bleeding.
DEREK, MARK, and TYLER are talking outside the door.

DEREK
(Muffled) She’ll be fine.
Let’s hurry before were late for
MR LANDRYS class again.

A figure, shrouded in darkness, slowly advances towards MINAMI.
The figure goes to reach MINAMI.

MINAMI
Urg….