Okay, so screw chapter 5. This one might be the worst chapter of Silent Tears yet. The dialogue! It’s cringe worthy. Still, I hope you’ve been enjoying the origin story of SOUTH.
Also, same as usual. Nothing has been edited so expect grammar and story issues. I'm so glad I've improved in my writing.
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A little about the story:
Minami Kyuki’s hearts a battle ground of despair. Faced with more difficulties in her life than the normal teen, Minami copes by living one day at a time. But how long before the tragic events of her past haunts her to her death?
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Chapter 6: Crimson Regret
INT. POLICE STATION
It’s a slow night, there are only a few cops on duty. One of
the cops is doing paper work, trying to suppress his tired
yawns. Another is standing by the window, looking blankly in
to the distance outside. Two others are talking amongst
themselves in the corner of the room over coffee. The phone
rings. The officer by the window gives a start, then
regaining his posture, turns his gaze towards the phone. He
answers the phone.
OFFICER TOMAS
Hello? … Yes, right away.
He turns around to the other men.
OFFICER TOMAS
Alright men, we got a few missing
persons out there. BRENT and
TREVOR, suit up, were heading out.
TIM, notify the others, were
looking for 2 Asians & a set of
twins, all female. Let’s go!
BRENT looks over to TIM & whispers.
BRENT
Finally, some action.
FADE
INT. OLD ABBANDONED HOUSE CAMPBELLTON
MARK STAGGER sits in the corner, inhaling the white pain
coming from his shoulder. He looks at KAYLA, who’s eyes were
fixed on her friend lying on the floor. He turns his deep
hazel eyes on the twins, VENNESSA and NATALIE. He places his
hand on his injured shoulder, then looks at it, his hand now
stained in his own blood. DEREK is still pacing the room,
looking in the brink of insanity. He keeps rubbing his hand
though his hair, mumbling strange words to himself, every
now and then turning his gun towards the crowd he has
captured in the room. MARK decides to risk talking to DEREK.
MARK
What do you plan on doing DEREK?
You can’t keep us all here forever.
DEREK, startled, points the gun at MARK.
DEREK
Quite MARK. You still never told me
what you were doing here in the
first place, with ought me.
MARK
I came to my senses. So, I decided
to free them before they were hurt.
Too late for that I guess.
DEREK takes in a deep breath, looking up. He turns his gaze
towards MARK, his back hunched over, his gun still still
pointing at his once friend.
DEREK
You tried to free them? Well how’s
that working out for you.
DEREK puts one hand on his head, rubs it through his hair.
DEREK
Now because of you look what
happened. Two innocents are stuck
here.
MARK speaks, but mainly to himself.
MARK
Hey, it wasn’t my idea to bring
them here in the first place.
DEREK walks swiftly towards MARK, a crazed look in his eyes,
the points the gun MARKS face; the twins and KAYLA scream.
DEREK
What did you say?
MARK cowers in the corner, his arms raised over his head.
MARK
N-nothing man! I was just following
what you told me to do, leave me
out of this!
DEREK turns around then screams.
DEREK
Aw man I’m in a s*** load of
trouble aren’t I.
MARK
No s***.
NATALIE, still in her own world, speaks, but so low its
almost as if she speaks to no one.
NATALIE
What do you want from us?
DEREK points the gun at NATALIE. Her sister, shakes with
fear for her sibling.
VENNESSA
Please…. Please, oh God almighty,
please. I don’t…. Please….
NATALIES eyes are no longer filled with fear. Her mind seems
to be in a state of shock and confusion.
DEREK
I didn’t want you, no, not you two
to be hurt. MARK either, but
now…. I had no choice. No choice.
Just you two!
DEREK looks at MINAMI and KAYLA.
DEREK
You’re the ones this world is better
off with!
MINAMI sturs on the floor. KAYLA inches towards the girl.
KAYLA
Mi.. na…mi?
MINAMI, with eyes still closed, speaks softly.
MINAMI
How many drops of blood will it
take for you?
DEREK
Wha-?
MINAMI slowly gets up.
KAYLA
MINA!
THE TWINS
MINAMI!
MARK
She’s alive. F****** good s***.
MINAMI slowly sits up, KAYLA moves forward to aid her.
MINAMI then raises her hand to her head, wincing in pain.
She looks at DEREK.
MINAMI
How many?
DEREK
What you talking about b****?
Spit flys from his mouth. Tears are now running down his
eyes, his lips becoming wet from his own saliva running out
of his mouth; his body, shaking in what seems to be fear.
MINAMI
How many others have you hurt? 1?
2? 10? How many? I know we
certainly werent the first. I get
you.
DEREK
NO YOU DON’T!
MINAMI slowly stands up, staggering.
MINAMI
Yes. I do. Ive had my family ripped
away from me too. I feel your
anger, your pain.
DEREK bends over, both hands to his head, screaming as loud
as he can.
DEREK
SHUT UP!
He cocks his gun and goes to shoot MINAMI. MARK gets up.
MARK
NO!
EXT. OLD ABBADONED HOUSE CAMPBELLTON
Gun shots can be heard, birds flutter in the distance.
EXT. CAMPBELLTON
The three officers look at each other as they hear gun shots
in the distance. They pull over their car on the side of the
road.
BRENT
What was that?
TOMAS
Gun shots.
TIM raises his gun and looks at his boss as to what to do
next.
TOMAS
Let’s go.
The men climb out of the car and head into the bushes, guns
raised. TOMAS reaches for his walkie talkie.
TOMAS
This is officer TOMAS, we need back
up on that old road. Two gun shots
were fired. I repeat, back up…
TIM, slightly ahead of his two coworkers, pushes through
the bushes. He stops in his tracks.
TIM
Boss? Check this out.
TOMAS walks past the bushes, BRENT following him.
TOMAS
Let’s check it out.
INT. OLD ABBANDONED HOUSE CAMPBELLTON
The three cops enter silently and switly, guns ready to
shoot. Muffled noises can be hear from the room below.
Whispering, TIM speaks.
TIM
Should we wait for back up?
TOMAS
No. I don’t want to risk it. You
stay here, let them know where we
are. BRENT and I will go check it
out.
TIM, shivering slightly from the still ringing sounds of gun
shots, nods. His partners leave him behind, alone, shivering
in the darkness.