Continuing on with the original story of SOUTH, Silent Tears, here is chapter 2. I love looking back at old stuff and seeing how far I’ve come. This stuff is golden.
Also, I’ve left the story unedited, so you can see all its flaws, both story wise and grammatically.
A little about the story:
Minami Kyuki’s hearts a battle ground of despair. Faced with more difficulties in her life than the normal teen, Minami copes by living one day at a time. But how long before the tragic events of her past haunts her to her death?
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Chapter 2: Trapped
INT. SUGUARMOUNT SENIOR HIGH MR LANDRYS CHEMISTRY CLASS
MR LANDRY is standing by his desk, pointing at the board, explaining
a chemistry problem. The class appears to be bored. TYLER
BUTTLER and MARK STAGGER are anxious, nervous looking. MARK
fumbles with his pencil. DEREK BEYIT sits at his desk, calm,
and taking notes from the board. He glares at MARK, who now
looks intently at the board, staring into the abyss. VENESSA and
NATALIE DOUMONT look at each other. NATALIE takes a a piece
of her chemistry notes, writes down a note, then passes it
on to VENESSA. The note reads: “I saw MINAMI walking to
school this morning. Where is she?” VENESSA shrugs, then
leans forward.
VENESSA
(Whispering) Come to think of
it, I haven’t seen KAYLA here
this morning either.
MR LANDRY
Girls! Passing notes and whispering
during my lectures?
VENESSA and NATALIE both jump, startled by the sudden appearance
of their teacher.
NATALIE
Sorry sir.
MR LANDRY goes to speak when the bell rings. The twins pick up
their things and leave the room swiftly.
INT. SUGUARMOUNT SENIOR HIGH HALLWAY
Students rush about to get to their next class, while some take
their time and chat on their cell phones. Others go to their
lockers, searching for an item they have forgotten. DEREK,
MARK, and TYLER was seen walking down the hall.
MARK
DEREK, I think the twins are on to
us.
TYLER
No they are not.
MARK
Uh huh!
DEREK
Shut up! They’re just noticing there
not at school. They don’t have a
clue it’s us.
INT. CAMPBELLTON MILL
MR CONNERY is reading the morning newspaper when the phone suddenly
rings, startling her. MR CONNERY looks at the phone. He
screws up his face in a scowl.
MR CONNERY
Darn school again. What the hell do
they want now? TRAVIS better not be
in trouble again.
He picks up the phone.
MR CONNERY
Hello?
SUGUARMOUNT PRE-RECORDED MESSAGE
This is the Vice-Principal of
Suguarmount Senior High, MR RODD. I
am calling to inform you that your
son or daughter has missed
MRS CONNERY hangs up the phone, looking very unpleased.
MRS CONNERY
TRAVIS CONNERY when you get home.
INT. CAMPBELLTON AN OLD ABANDONED HOUSE
MINAMI is seen lying on the basement floor in the dark, bleeding.
A dark figure is kneeled over MINAMI, hand outreached.
THE FIGURE
(Whispers) Hey!
The figure touches MINAMI. MINAMI winces in pain, then
slowly opens her eyes.
MINAMI
Erg... Wha? <Ow….>
MINAMI slowly sits up and blinks.
THE FIGURE
MINAMI!
MINAMI
Wha? Who are-?
The figure hugs MINAMI, then let’s go almost as fast. MINAMI takes
a look at the figure, who looks well beaten. Before MINAMI
can realize who it is, the figure speaks again.
THE FIGURE
They got to you to!
MINAMI
KAYLA? Is that you?
The light shines on the figure, revealing her true identity.
KAYLA
Yeah. I’ve been here since after
the Talent show. On my way home,
these 3 guys came up to me and
started throwing rocks at me, then
they forced me here. I haven’t been
able to sleep a wink.
As KAYLA speaks, a flash back shows her words.
MINAMI
Why? What did we do?
KAYLA shrugs. MINAMI looks around.
MINAMI
What do we do now?
KAYLA
Get out. That’s what.
KAYLA looks to the door.
KAYLA
The question is how.
MINAMI gets up then stumbles towards the door. She takes a good
look at it then does a powerful back kick. MINAMI falls back
to the ground, but the door does not budge.
KAYLA
The door is barred on the outside
you know.
MINAMI is seen rubbing her foot.
MINAMI
Yeah. Thanks for the info. Have you
looked around the place? Maybe
there’s another exit. (To herself)
Like a portal to another world or
something cool like that.
KAYLA
No. I was too afraid to move. (To
herself) You and your portals.
MINAMI
Well then, what are we waiting for.
MINAMI limps past KAYLA and begins to feel around, looking
for an exit.
MINAMI
Aha!
KAYLA
WHAT?
MINAMI
I found something!
KAYLA
I repeat, what?!
MINAMI
Hehe. A business card!
KAYLA
MINAMI!
MINAMI
I can add this to my collection….
KAYLA rolls her eyes, while MINAMI inspects the card.
MINAMI
Spiffy. It’s in Japanese…
KAYLA
There’s got to be a way out-
MINAMI
(To herself)Hey someone wrote
on the back!
KAYLA
Here. Maybe if we move some of
those crates, (if that’s what they
are), we might find a door or
something.
MINAMI squints, trying to read the writing.
MINAMI
(To herself) DEREK….
(Mumble) See you soon
(Mumble)(Gasp)
KAYLA turns around to look at MINAMI
KAYLA
What now?
MINAMI
I…. I know that writing.
KAYLA
So? It’s not going to help us get
out of here.
MINAMI
(To herself) Well, the card is
in Japanese, but that’s not
important. It’s just a regular
business card for some random
place. It’s what on the back,
written in English that got my
attention.
KAYLA
Let me see it.
MINAMI hands over the card to KAYLA. KAYLA takes a good look
at the card and reads it aloud.
KAYLA
DEREK, I am so happy to have meet
you. See you soon. Don’t tell,
means no lies.
KAYLA looks up.
KAYLA
DEREK… I think I know someone by
that name.
MINAMI
Well, you do. He’s the guy who
brought me here, and by the looks
of it, you too. (Narrative
Bubble) Where have I seen this
writing before?
KAYLA
That’s it, we got to get out of
here!
MINAMI
Snaps! I know where I’ve seen it!
KAYLA
Where?
MINAMI
My place, the night of the murder.
Suddenly, up above, a noise could be heard.