The Original SOUTH: Silent Tears ch 4 / by A.M. Molloy

A new day, a ‘new’ installment, chapter 4, of the original story Silent Tears, before it became SOUTH. I warn you, this story is so bad, (and short), that it’s funny. This one here is real gold in the way of bad writing. 

(Seriously, where did I come up with this stuff?)

Unedited, which means grammar and story flaws are plentiful. 

A little about the story:

Minami Kyuki’s hearts a battle ground of despair. Faced with more difficulties in her life than the normal teen, Minami copes by living one day at a time. But how long before the tragic events of her past haunts her to her death?

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Silent Tears Vol1

Chapter 4: Hostages


         INT. CAMPBELLTON AN OLD ABANDONED HOUSE

                             MARK STAGGER
                   You can’t harm them all! There’s
                   too many of them!

         DEREK reaches for something in his pocket, tightening his grip
         on the boy, who stands silent in fear.

                             DEREK BEIYIT
                   Maybe not all, but I got to start
                   somewhere.

         DEREK swiftly pulls out a gun, then shoots the boy in the head,
         killing him instantly. MINAMI, KAYLA, and MARK stand back in
         shock and fear. KAYLA falls to the ground, sobbing,
         shrieking. MARK slowly moves away from DEREK, muttering
         words only he can hear. MINAMI’s eyes widen, her hands begin
         to shakes, clenching into a tight fist.

         FLASH BACK of the murderer of her family, the gun in his hands
         as he shots MINAMI’s parents. END FLASHBACK.

         DEREK points the gun at KAYLA and MINAMI. KAYLA screams as MARK
         falls to the ground, tears pouring out of his dark brown
         eyes.

                             MINAMI
                   No…. no…. (screams) NO!

                             DEREK
                   Shut up b**** or your next.

         He points the gun at her.

                             DEREK
                   I’ve had enough of Asians! There
                   good for nothing low life’s, who
                   take away all that is good in this
                   world.

         MINAMI tilts her head, an insane look in her eyes. She is
         not herself.

                             MINAMI
                   Your no better than him.

         MINAMI slowly moves towards DEREK, her left hand moving towards
         the chain attached to her pants.

                             MINAMI
                   KAYLA, do you know why I always
                   have this chain with me?

                             KAYLA
                   What the hell? Are you crazy? He’s
                   got a bloody gun!

         DEREK points the gun towards KAYLA.

                             DEREK
                   Shut the hell up!

         KAYLA shrieks, cowering in the corner.

                             MINAMI
                   No. It’s not a fashion statement.

         She undoes the chain from her pants.

                             MINAMI
                   It’s so I can hurt people like YOU!

         She lunges towards DEREK, rage in her eyes. DEREK shoots, misses.
         He fires again, missing MINAMI but grazing MARK on the
         shoulder. MARK screams in pain. MINAMI reaches DEREK, puts
         the chain around his neck and pulls with all her might.
         DEREK chokes.

                             MINAMI
                   Who’s better now? I wasn’t able to
                   stop you then, but now

                             DEREK
                   Wha… cough… talkin ‘bout?

         She pulls harder. DEREKS eyes begin to roll back.

                             KAYLA
                   MINAMI NO!

         MINAMI looks up, her eyes change, revealing fear. She drops the
         chain. DEREK holds his neck, recovers, then points the gun
         at MINAMI. She falls to her knees.

                             MINAMI
                   Not again. Please, not again.

                             DEREK
                   I was right. You’re all insane! You
                   wanna know why I dislike your
                   'kind?’ I was 14.

         He holds the gun shakenly at MINAMI.

                             DEREK
                   Things were great. Then we went for
                   that trip in Japan.

         FLASH BACK as he talks.

                             DEREK
                   Me and my mom were having a great
                   time, but we got lost. Then this
                   man with a scar on his left check
                   came up to us. We ask him where we
                   were, then he took out a gun.

                             DEREK’S MOM
                   Please! Don’t harm my son!

         The man grabs YOUNG DEREK by his hair, throws him aside.
         YOUNG DEREK’s mom screams. The man shoots both her legs.
         YOUNG DEREK runs to hide behind a garbage can as the man
         deals the final bow to his mother. END FLASH BACK. DEREKS
         eyes tear up.

                             DEREK
                   He KILLED her! I saw her murdered.
                   The cops didn’t even do anything. 
                   He, and all the rest of the Asian
                   world will pay!

         He begins to point the gun at everyone, as if not sure who
         to shoot first. MARK is still in the corner, in pain.

         MINAMI gets up, clearly angered by DEREK’S story. She points
         to the scar on her face.

                             MINAMI
                   See this scar? See it? This is a
                   constant reminder of what I’ve
                   seen. I would count myself lucky if
                   I were you, considering that’s all
                   YOU seen. I witnessed BOTH of my
                   parents die, along with the rest of
                   my family too. So one of your
                   parents is dead. Big deal. Grow up!

         DEREK grabs MINAMI by the shoulders, pushes her against the
         wall and points the gun to her head.

                             DEREK
                   SHURT UP! What do you know, your
                   just as bad as him! You bloody
                   tried to kill me!

                             MINAMI
                   I tried to kill you? You tried to
                   kill US! You’re the one with the gun!

         DEREK cocks the gun, anger in his eyes, then points it at
         MINAMI.

                             KAYLA
                   MINAMI!

                             MARK
                   DEREK NO!

         Shot of outside the old house as a gunshot is heard.

         EXT. CAMPBELLTON

         VENESSA and NATALIE DOUMONT are seen leaving their house.

                             NATALIE
                   We’ll be back in an hour or so.

                             VENESSA
                   We just got choir practice.

         They close the door.

                             NATALIE
                   I wonder if MINAMI and KAYLA will
                   be there, they weren’t in school.

                             VENESSA
                   It’s choir. You know how much
                   MINAMI likes to sing. If she’s not
                   there, then something is wrong.

                             NATALIE
                   Haha yeah. True too.

         DENNIS comes into the scene while the twins are walking.

                             DENNIS
                   Allo les filles. Did you see
                   MINAMI?

                             VENESSA
                   No, she wasn’t at school, why?

                             DENNIS
                   She hasn’t come home yet.

         The twins look at each other.

                             NATALIE
                   We’ll let you know if we see her.

         EXT. SOMEWHERE IN CAMPBELLTON

         VENESSA and NATALIE are seen walking in the woods.

                             NATALIE
                   I can’t believe you talked me into
                   this. What was I thinking? Skipping
                   choir to go look for them.

                             VENESSA
                   Come on NAT, this is our friends
                   we’re talking about, we should be
                   looking for them.

         NATALIE stops.

                             NATALIE
                   Shouldn’t we have told mom at
                   least? Or call the cops. Yeah, it’s
                   their jobs to do this kind of
                   thing.

         VENESSA turns around to face her sister.

                             VENESSA
                   Yeah, we should, but who knows
                   MINAMI and KAYLA better than us?

                             NATALIE
                        (to herself) Their parent’s
                        maybe?

         A gunshot is heard in the distance, both twins twirl around
         to the direction of the noise.

                             NATALIE AND VENESSA
                   What was that?

                             VENESSA
                   That was close by.

                             NATALIE
                   And we should be farther away then.

                             VENESSA
                   What if they’re in danger?

                             NATALIE
                   All the more reason to call the
                   cops.

         VENESSA grabs NATALIE and drags her to where they heard a
         gunshot. Passing a couple of threes, they take a left turn
         and an old house is reveled. The place doesn’t look sturdy,
         but it stands tall and proud in the moon light.

                             NATALIE
                   We’re not going in THERE are we?
                   Exploring things is MINAMI’s job,
                   not ours.

                             VENESSA
                   Which would be a perfect place to
                   go check if she is there….

         She looks at NATALIE.

                             VENESSA
                   You go first.

                             NATALIE
                   What? Are you crazy?

                             VENESSA
                   Fine.

         VENESSA craws slowly towards the old building, NATALIE
         follows, hesitantly.

         INT. OLD ABANDONED HOUSE CAMPBELLTON

         There are muffled voices coming from the floor below.

                             NATALIE
                   Look VENESSA, someone was here!

         VENESSA and NATALIE find a door, slightly ajar. They creep
         down the stairs. They reach the bottom to find MINAMI lying
         on the floor, KAYLA screaming, a boy in the corner, another
         on the floor, blood from his head, and another boy with a
         gun. KAYLA looks up. She can barely speak from the fear, but
         utters words in a whisper.

                             KAYLA
                   Run…

         The twins stand in shock. Then DEREK turns around, faces the
         twins. He points the gun at them. Shot of the twins.

                             NATALIE
                   I really wish I didn’t let you talk
                   me into this.

Source: silent-tears4