A new day, a ‘new’ installment, chapter 4, of the original story Silent Tears, before it became SOUTH. I warn you, this story is so bad, (and short), that it’s funny. This one here is real gold in the way of bad writing.
(Seriously, where did I come up with this stuff?)
Unedited, which means grammar and story flaws are plentiful.
A little about the story:
Minami Kyuki’s hearts a battle ground of despair. Faced with more difficulties in her life than the normal teen, Minami copes by living one day at a time. But how long before the tragic events of her past haunts her to her death?
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Chapter 4: Hostages
INT. CAMPBELLTON AN OLD ABANDONED HOUSE
MARK STAGGER
You can’t harm them all! There’s
too many of them!
DEREK reaches for something in his pocket, tightening his grip
on the boy, who stands silent in fear.
DEREK BEIYIT
Maybe not all, but I got to start
somewhere.
DEREK swiftly pulls out a gun, then shoots the boy in the head,
killing him instantly. MINAMI, KAYLA, and MARK stand back in
shock and fear. KAYLA falls to the ground, sobbing,
shrieking. MARK slowly moves away from DEREK, muttering
words only he can hear. MINAMI’s eyes widen, her hands begin
to shakes, clenching into a tight fist.
FLASH BACK of the murderer of her family, the gun in his hands
as he shots MINAMI’s parents. END FLASHBACK.
DEREK points the gun at KAYLA and MINAMI. KAYLA screams as MARK
falls to the ground, tears pouring out of his dark brown
eyes.
MINAMI
No…. no…. (screams) NO!
DEREK
Shut up b**** or your next.
He points the gun at her.
DEREK
I’ve had enough of Asians! There
good for nothing low life’s, who
take away all that is good in this
world.
MINAMI tilts her head, an insane look in her eyes. She is
not herself.
MINAMI
Your no better than him.
MINAMI slowly moves towards DEREK, her left hand moving towards
the chain attached to her pants.
MINAMI
KAYLA, do you know why I always
have this chain with me?
KAYLA
What the hell? Are you crazy? He’s
got a bloody gun!
DEREK points the gun towards KAYLA.
DEREK
Shut the hell up!
KAYLA shrieks, cowering in the corner.
MINAMI
No. It’s not a fashion statement.
She undoes the chain from her pants.
MINAMI
It’s so I can hurt people like YOU!
She lunges towards DEREK, rage in her eyes. DEREK shoots, misses.
He fires again, missing MINAMI but grazing MARK on the
shoulder. MARK screams in pain. MINAMI reaches DEREK, puts
the chain around his neck and pulls with all her might.
DEREK chokes.
MINAMI
Who’s better now? I wasn’t able to
stop you then, but now
DEREK
Wha… cough… talkin ‘bout?
She pulls harder. DEREKS eyes begin to roll back.
KAYLA
MINAMI NO!
MINAMI looks up, her eyes change, revealing fear. She drops the
chain. DEREK holds his neck, recovers, then points the gun
at MINAMI. She falls to her knees.
MINAMI
Not again. Please, not again.
DEREK
I was right. You’re all insane! You
wanna know why I dislike your
'kind?’ I was 14.
He holds the gun shakenly at MINAMI.
DEREK
Things were great. Then we went for
that trip in Japan.
FLASH BACK as he talks.
DEREK
Me and my mom were having a great
time, but we got lost. Then this
man with a scar on his left check
came up to us. We ask him where we
were, then he took out a gun.
DEREK’S MOM
Please! Don’t harm my son!
The man grabs YOUNG DEREK by his hair, throws him aside.
YOUNG DEREK’s mom screams. The man shoots both her legs.
YOUNG DEREK runs to hide behind a garbage can as the man
deals the final bow to his mother. END FLASH BACK. DEREKS
eyes tear up.
DEREK
He KILLED her! I saw her murdered.
The cops didn’t even do anything.
He, and all the rest of the Asian
world will pay!
He begins to point the gun at everyone, as if not sure who
to shoot first. MARK is still in the corner, in pain.
MINAMI gets up, clearly angered by DEREK’S story. She points
to the scar on her face.
MINAMI
See this scar? See it? This is a
constant reminder of what I’ve
seen. I would count myself lucky if
I were you, considering that’s all
YOU seen. I witnessed BOTH of my
parents die, along with the rest of
my family too. So one of your
parents is dead. Big deal. Grow up!
DEREK grabs MINAMI by the shoulders, pushes her against the
wall and points the gun to her head.
DEREK
SHURT UP! What do you know, your
just as bad as him! You bloody
tried to kill me!
MINAMI
I tried to kill you? You tried to
kill US! You’re the one with the gun!
DEREK cocks the gun, anger in his eyes, then points it at
MINAMI.
KAYLA
MINAMI!
MARK
DEREK NO!
Shot of outside the old house as a gunshot is heard.
EXT. CAMPBELLTON
VENESSA and NATALIE DOUMONT are seen leaving their house.
NATALIE
We’ll be back in an hour or so.
VENESSA
We just got choir practice.
They close the door.
NATALIE
I wonder if MINAMI and KAYLA will
be there, they weren’t in school.
VENESSA
It’s choir. You know how much
MINAMI likes to sing. If she’s not
there, then something is wrong.
NATALIE
Haha yeah. True too.
DENNIS comes into the scene while the twins are walking.
DENNIS
Allo les filles. Did you see
MINAMI?
VENESSA
No, she wasn’t at school, why?
DENNIS
She hasn’t come home yet.
The twins look at each other.
NATALIE
We’ll let you know if we see her.
EXT. SOMEWHERE IN CAMPBELLTON
VENESSA and NATALIE are seen walking in the woods.
NATALIE
I can’t believe you talked me into
this. What was I thinking? Skipping
choir to go look for them.
VENESSA
Come on NAT, this is our friends
we’re talking about, we should be
looking for them.
NATALIE stops.
NATALIE
Shouldn’t we have told mom at
least? Or call the cops. Yeah, it’s
their jobs to do this kind of
thing.
VENESSA turns around to face her sister.
VENESSA
Yeah, we should, but who knows
MINAMI and KAYLA better than us?
NATALIE
(to herself) Their parent’s
maybe?
A gunshot is heard in the distance, both twins twirl around
to the direction of the noise.
NATALIE AND VENESSA
What was that?
VENESSA
That was close by.
NATALIE
And we should be farther away then.
VENESSA
What if they’re in danger?
NATALIE
All the more reason to call the
cops.
VENESSA grabs NATALIE and drags her to where they heard a
gunshot. Passing a couple of threes, they take a left turn
and an old house is reveled. The place doesn’t look sturdy,
but it stands tall and proud in the moon light.
NATALIE
We’re not going in THERE are we?
Exploring things is MINAMI’s job,
not ours.
VENESSA
Which would be a perfect place to
go check if she is there….
She looks at NATALIE.
VENESSA
You go first.
NATALIE
What? Are you crazy?
VENESSA
Fine.
VENESSA craws slowly towards the old building, NATALIE
follows, hesitantly.
INT. OLD ABANDONED HOUSE CAMPBELLTON
There are muffled voices coming from the floor below.
NATALIE
Look VENESSA, someone was here!
VENESSA and NATALIE find a door, slightly ajar. They creep
down the stairs. They reach the bottom to find MINAMI lying
on the floor, KAYLA screaming, a boy in the corner, another
on the floor, blood from his head, and another boy with a
gun. KAYLA looks up. She can barely speak from the fear, but
utters words in a whisper.
KAYLA
Run…
The twins stand in shock. Then DEREK turns around, faces the
twins. He points the gun at them. Shot of the twins.
NATALIE
I really wish I didn’t let you talk
me into this.